So far, that is the most beautiful haiku I've ever read !!
Nice indeed;I would have personally removed the second line and kept it simple like this:The old bent treebathing in the sunsetwarms its crooked joints
An old tree, bentlonely on its moundbathing in the sunsetThe river flows through historyforgive me for being so forward but would this not make it more of a Haiku
If I may be so forward...An Old tree, bentbathing in the sunsetwood knocks time The river runs through historywould this make it more of an Haiku?
Thank you everyone!And yes, I like the simple version.