Wednesday, 18 August 2010

The Web

Through the entangled cables
The sun shines 
Like a spider

05/08/2010

8 comments:

  1. Through the entangled cables
    The sun shines
    Like a spider's net

    (I'm assuming that you meant it's like the spider's net, not the spider itself; I may be wrong, of course).

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  2. The sun, spreading its rays through and outside the entangled cables that look like a net, looks like a spider. As if the rays are the spider's legs and the cables are the web. So the sun looks like a spider. Any idea?
    :-)

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  3. I went for my daily walk to check that haiku again. It is not easily perceived. I reached down stairs to the angle where the sun gets in the middle of the cables' web, and once looking at the sun, rays start to spread from every side, like a spider moving its legs... If it's not a good haiku, I can change it. I got another haiku on my way back! :-)

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  4. Alright, no need to change it, just remove the last word (of my version):

    Through the entangled cables
    The sun shines like a spider

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  5. ThanKs! Looking forward for a haiku of yours.

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  6. Remember to keep the original haiku for reference.

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  7. Ok. The haiku before modification:
    The sun shines
    Through the entangled cables
    Like a spider

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  8. this one is hard
    reading ur comments and Learning....

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