Through the entangled cablesThe sun shinesLike a spider's net(I'm assuming that you meant it's like the spider's net, not the spider itself; I may be wrong, of course).
The sun, spreading its rays through and outside the entangled cables that look like a net, looks like a spider. As if the rays are the spider's legs and the cables are the web. So the sun looks like a spider. Any idea? :-)
I went for my daily walk to check that haiku again. It is not easily perceived. I reached down stairs to the angle where the sun gets in the middle of the cables' web, and once looking at the sun, rays start to spread from every side, like a spider moving its legs... If it's not a good haiku, I can change it. I got another haiku on my way back! :-)
Alright, no need to change it, just remove the last word (of my version):Through the entangled cablesThe sun shines like a spider
ThanKs! Looking forward for a haiku of yours.
Remember to keep the original haiku for reference.
Ok. The haiku before modification:The sun shinesThrough the entangled cablesLike a spider
this one is hard reading ur comments and Learning....