Monday, 7 February 2011

Late

Rain pouring down
Battling against the seconds
The student runs

1 comment:

  1. Nice, Ramy.

    I can almost "see" what you saw at that moment of insight. This is a good sign which means that your haiku served as a medium to transmit your "mini-satori" moment to me, the reader.

    If I were to change anything, I would add "to the exam" / "to the exam room" or something similar at the end, maybe to guide the reader a little bit (I assume the sight was at university and during final exams)?

    I would also add a semi-colon at the end of the first line.

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