Yes, nice; was the waterfall really near the gutter, and where was this?
Well, along the road where I walk, on the side, where orange and lemon trees are planted 1 meter above, a 30 cm open gutter with nearly 20 m length, ends at the top of a slope, where a tiny waterfall flows with a wild sound of a big waterfall. On the way back, the waters are silent, far from the waterfall, interweaving (comme des tresses de cheveux), reflecting the sun, where it appears that the sun-rays are intertwining ... It was one long gutter, like a river ... :-)
Maybe the word "past" is wrong. Any suggestions?
Thanks for the explanation. "Past," on the contrary, is a great word here.
Thanks Paul for the comments! :-)
I have a comment about the title, though. Is "water" really the focal point? The haiku, however, shows that it is the interweaving of the sun-rays (?)Just an observation.
The water is the waterfall and the sun rays which are reflected by the interweaving running stripes of waters. The water and the sun rays became one, by reflection. I thought that the water can have many faces :-)I was thinking first about (Tresses) but I couldn't find it in English. It is Braids, I just remembered that the computer has a dictionary :-) Then I realized that the braids of waters are the sun rays too. Maybe it is something about the sun rays .. Any suggestions for a title? :-)
What about "Sun Patterns," "Water Patterns," or tout simplement "Patterns" or "Weavings"?
Yes! "Patterns", tout simplement! :-)I loved this word in my first year of psychology. Dr Yacoub used to mention it as in "children see in patterns"!So, instead of "Water" as a title, the haiku will be called "Pattern".Thanks!! :-)
Sorry, the haiku will be called Patterns. The original was: WaterIn the gutter,Past the tiny waterfall,Sun-rays are interweaving
I recently measured that gutter's length with big footsteps, from its beginning till its end up to the slope where the tiny waterfall flows, approximately 140 m!
That's a BIG gutter indeed!
:-) It is not big, it is loooong !! It is one of the many gutters that I encounter on the road, and each has a different size, shape and water sound. Cheers!