Friday, 11 February 2011

Patterns

In the gutter,
Past the tiny waterfall,
Sun-rays are interweaving

11/02/2011

13 comments:

  1. Yes, nice; was the waterfall really near the gutter, and where was this?

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  2. Well, along the road where I walk, on the side, where orange and lemon trees are planted 1 meter above, a 30 cm open gutter with nearly 20 m length, ends at the top of a slope, where a tiny waterfall flows with a wild sound of a big waterfall. On the way back, the waters are silent, far from the waterfall, interweaving (comme des tresses de cheveux), reflecting the sun, where it appears that the sun-rays are intertwining ... It was one long gutter, like a river ...
    :-)

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  3. Maybe the word "past" is wrong. Any suggestions?

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  4. Thanks for the explanation.

    "Past," on the contrary, is a great word here.

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  5. Thanks Paul for the comments!
    :-)

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  6. I have a comment about the title, though.

    Is "water" really the focal point? The haiku, however, shows that it is the interweaving of the sun-rays (?)

    Just an observation.

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  7. The water is the waterfall and the sun rays which are reflected by the interweaving running stripes of waters. The water and the sun rays became one, by reflection. I thought that the water can have many faces :-)
    I was thinking first about (Tresses) but I couldn't find it in English. It is Braids, I just remembered that the computer has a dictionary :-) Then I realized that the braids of waters are the sun rays too.

    Maybe it is something about the sun rays ..
    Any suggestions for a title?
    :-)

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  8. What about "Sun Patterns," "Water Patterns," or tout simplement "Patterns" or "Weavings"?

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  9. Yes! "Patterns", tout simplement! :-)
    I loved this word in my first year of psychology. Dr Yacoub used to mention it as in "children see in patterns"!

    So, instead of "Water" as a title, the haiku will be called "Pattern".
    Thanks!! :-)

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  10. Sorry, the haiku will be called Patterns.
    The original was:

    Water

    In the gutter,
    Past the tiny waterfall,
    Sun-rays are interweaving

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  11. I recently measured that gutter's length with big footsteps, from its beginning till its end up to the slope where the tiny waterfall flows, approximately 140 m!

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  12. :-) It is not big, it is loooong !! It is one of the many gutters that I encounter on the road, and each has a different size, shape and water sound.
    Cheers!

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