Saturday, 5 March 2011

Global Warming

Standing on the top of the slope
Wind blowing in my ears
Glazing at the snowless hills

4 comments:

  1. Nice, Ramy! That moment must have been as sad for you as breathtaking!
    I see you started each sentence with a capital letter, the way we all do usually :-)
    Did you mean "Gazing" in the last line?

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  2. Nice; that's how I would have put it (the "-ing" at the beginning of each line needs to be broken):

    At the top of the slope
    The wind blows in my ears;
    Where has the snow gone?

    (plus it's also exactly 17 syllables!)

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  3. If I may share a suggestion:

    At the top of the slope
    The wind whispers in my ears
    Memories of white-capped hills

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  4. Maybe the phrase white-capped is wrong, so it might be "whitecap hills", or snow-capped hills for a clearer picture ...

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